My folktale is one I made up from something that I used to believe was true when I was younger. The story is told in first person, the girl is telling the story.
Mommy always told me to listen to her and always do as she says. She said that if I didn't listen the little birdy would tell her everything and tell my dad when he came home from work! I tried to always listen and be a good girl. The hardest thing to do was to fall asleep when she told me it was bedtime, sometimes it was still light out and others I just wasn't tired enough to fall asleep. She always would know that I was awake, she knew what happened when I was in my room, she knew that my sister and I fought and she knew that I sometimes went in the closet and took out the toys, but how? How did she know all this? I always looked for a birdy under the bed, in the closet, at the window but never found one. At times I used to shut the shades and then peek from down under to see if the birdy was peeking in. I never found the little birdy, but my mother was always able to know what we were doing.
When daddy would come home, he knew what we had done that day, he knew what we ate, what we did at school and what we did after, but how? The little birdy, always told them everything. I could never find the birdy and when I did anything I would always look twice to see if the birdy was around and it was never anywhere to be found. I always thought twice before doing anything because I would know the birdy would tell my parents so I made wiser decisions at school and at home. This helped me stay out of trouble, just because I couldn't find the birdy didn't mean it wasn't around, it always told my parents everything.
I finally figured out the little birdy was my mom, she told my dad everything and blamed it on the birdy and my little brother told my mom most things she didn't see so his was the other birdy. I know use the same birdy with my kids.
I guess the lesson behind this story is that you always think twice when you believe that someone is watching or someone will tell on you, so keep in mind that there is always a little birdy watching and you might think twice before doing something.
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Hello there. I think it's great that you made up a story, it was very interesting; however, I think the assignment was to take a fairytale and then retell it from a different point of view, or different time period. Because this is an original story, it's hard to do a comparison.
ReplyDeleteI don't know if we are supposed to be helping to check for grammar and punctuation and stuff like that, but in case we are, I would take the comma out after "The little birdy", a period after "stay out of trouble", change his to he and change know to now. I would also change the last sentence to so if you keep in mind that there is always a little birdy watching, you might think twice before doing something.
I know we have to write three rough drafts, so I hope this helps. :)
Thank you, and you were right it was that I was supposed to retell the same fairytale. I just figured that out so I just posted that. I am just having such a hard time posting things on this blog site, for some reason it wasn't working earlier. Thanks for your comments:)
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